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A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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In
the
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modern society
person
's qualities are
rather
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 controversial topic. One group of
people
 think that social status and wealth are the most important things,
while
 others are convinced that kindness and dignity are far more crucial. I fully agree with
opinion
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 that old-fashioned values are still relevant today because it is far more
viatl
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vital
 to be surrounded by friends, who are kind and concerned about you, than by individuals, who are more
powerfull
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powerful
 in
the
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society but do not have any of the best human values. First of all, it is evident that even the richest and the most famous
people
 can do nasty and awful things. What I mean,
if
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 someone has
acievments
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achievements
such
 as popularity or
astonishing
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 amount of money in the bank, it will not mean that he is a good
person
.
For instance
, nowadays tabloids provide a lot of information about different celebrities, who
was
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 involved in scandals.
Therefore
, These
people
are
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definetely
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definitely
 ownes either wealth
and
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or
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 social status, but they are not good friends and in many
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 even not appropriate family members.
Furthermore
, today a lot of
people
 prefer to avoid toxic and
unpleasent
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unpleasant
people
 even if they are has a lot of influential connections.
Additionally
, today some individuals put their effort to get rid of bad
people
.
For instance
, there
a
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huge number of tutors, who help
people
 with recognising and avoiding
people
 with unpleasant
qualitiies
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qualities
.
In other
words
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 wise
person
understand
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 that in a number of
situations
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 it is nowhere
like
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as crucial as having
reliable
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person
 near. In conclusion, I am convinced that it is far more important to judge
people
 by their actions and behaviour than by their social status.
Although
 rich
people
 can be useful
for
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 someone in some situations, they
are
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also
 can betray easier than
people
 with higher moral
qulities
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qualities
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