Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 per cent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. To what extent do you agree?

Although
females are well represented in the workforce in developed countries, it is not very common to see them
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top-level positions in
companies
.
Consequently
, there is an idea that
companies
should be obliged to allocate a part of
such
positions to
women
. In my opinion, it is a very good idea because it will create additional motivation in career development for other
women
and because
such
diversity will positively contribute to
cultures
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of
companies
.
Firstly
, it will create role models for other
women
and motivate them to consider going to top-level positions.
While
it is uncommon to see
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, it may be too radical for girls to
dreem
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dream
about being a CEO.
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of thinking
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knowledge to acquire, a good part of
efforts
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can go
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toward
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dealing with thoughts about social rejection.
For example
, the popularity of movements that encourage females to become
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changed
career
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outlook for many teenagers from being a model or an artist to launching a company.
Secondly
, higher diversity in leadership may shape a company's culture to become more comfortable for a wide range of employees. Job applicants may be a bit concerned if their potential team consists
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significantly different individuals, because it may be harder to fit in.
For example
, reviews on the website “glassdor.com” suggest that there is a positive correlation between a score in the category “comfortable atmosphere” and the fact that a woman is in charge there.
To conclude
, it is a great idea to create some quotas for
women
in high-level roles in
companies
because it will create
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an incentive
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incentive
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incentives
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for higher ambitions for other
women
, and, most likely, it will create
better
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a better
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working environment. Diversity is an effective thing to involve more people
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the productive workforce.
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