Some people think that the teenager’s years are the happiest times of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

While
some people are of the opinion that teenagers experience more
happiness
than adults because adults are saddled with greater responsibilities, I tend to agree more with the opinion that despite having more things to cater for as grown-ups, adulthood gives us more
happiness
as we will discuss
further
. On one hand, there are some benefits that
comes
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with being young which can lead to
happiness
.
Firstly
,as a young ,
adult
you are not required to fulfil any major obligation eg paying off school fees, providing food and shelter etc rather you have people that cater for your every need.
This
can result in less stress and more
happiness
.
On the other hand
, the Teenage age is a time of discovery. Most kids at
this
age are battling with puberty, what to make of
life
and so on . Because of
this
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they spend time trying to discover themselves than exploring
happiness
.
Whereas
, Adulthood gives one the opportunity to take charge of their
life
. ,First as ,
adult
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an adult
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you have experienced many phases of
life
and have become accustomed to them. You know what you want and go for it without any external interference eg if you want to lead a luxurious
life
,you know money can help you achieve that
therefore
you work hard to achieve your desires.
Secondly
, as ,
adult
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an adult
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you have freedom of choice. You can decide to go for a vacation,take a break from work and pursue the
happiness
you desire.
Finally
,all the dreams one has during their younger days, the time to achieve most of them is during their older days. In conclusion, both teenage and
adult
age gives a considerable amount of
happiness
but as ,adults we take charge of our
happiness
more and make it happen the way we want.
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