Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is often said that
music
has the power to unite and connect people, regardless of their culture or age. I fully agree with
this
point of view, and will give my reasons below.
Music
can certainly reach across cultural and national boundaries and bring people together. Perhaps the best examples of
this
are the Live Aid concerts that took place in the 1980s, and were broadcast to a global audience. Two live events were held simultaneously in the UK and the US, with the aim of raising funds for famine relief in Ethiopia. The concerts have been hugely successful, both in terms of the number of people around the world watching them and their impact on
international public perception
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the international public perception
of hunger. I believe they have proven that
music
is indeed the global language
of
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on
the planet. As well as transcending cultures,
music
has the ability to connect people from different generations. Regardless of age, we can all enjoy a memorable tune, a powerful rhythm or a great voice, and the best songs seem to have the same
magic
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magical
effect on all.
both
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Both
of us.
This
will explain why
television
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television, music
music
competitions,
such
as ‘The X Factor’ or ‘The Voice’, are popular programs during the golden hour. These shows attract a huge audience because popular songs and singing both attract children, parents and grandparents alike. I don't think there is any other form of entertainment that brings families together
this
way. In short, I believe
music
is unique in its ability to create shared experiences among people, regardless of culture and age.
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