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The graph shows average carbon dioxide (cO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007

The graph shows average carbon dioxide (cO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007
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The line chart depicts information about the average of carbon dioxide emitted by each person in
the
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Sweden,
Itlay
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Italy
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, Portugal and
United
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 Kingdom. After analysing the line graph, it can be seen clearly that in 1967, the citizens of America
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realeased
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released
 carbon dioxide which was recorded at
nearby
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nearly
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 11 metric tonnes and after 10 years it was almost
same
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,
whereas
 in the
last
year
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 it declined by approximately
2
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. In the case
Sweden
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of Sweden
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 it
was
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started from 8 metric tonnes,
however
 in 1977, it
wad
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on
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the
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 peak point after that, it
was
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rapidly decreased till 2007. Moving
further
, near about 4 metric tonnes Co2 emissions by Italian in 1967 and between 1977 and 1997 it
was
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levelled-off
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levelled off
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 that was
consitituted
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constituted
 for nearly 7, whilst in 2007, it inclined just 8. Eventually, carbon dioxide emissions per person in
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Portugal was following
upwards
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an upwards
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 trend
in
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the all years.
Overall
, it is crystal clear that the maximum average of co2 emissions
in
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 the United State,
while
 the minimum was in Portugal.
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