The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.
This
bar chart depicts universal
sales
of the top brands of cell phones from 2009 to 2013. It's clear from the graph that the
Samsung
and
Nokia
phones had the most significant merchants in
this
period.
According to
what is shown, in 2009 we can see the
Nokia
brand have the most selling which is reached about 498
sales
. And,
Samsung
came after with an amount of nearly 248
sales
also
we can see
Apple
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Apple's
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company have a huge
plunged
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and it's almost reached about 10 counts and
ZTE
has almost 150
sales
,
LG
represented nearly 120
sales
.
Although
in 2011 we can see various merchants,
Nokia
also
have approximately the same level in increasing which is about 435
sales
while
,
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Samsung
have a minor increase with about 320
sales
and
Apple
gradually grew and their
sales
reached about 99,
LG
had dropped slightly in
this
year and
ZTE
represented a slight increase almost can notice.
While
,
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in
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2013 we can see in the graph
Samsung
had
significant
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soared with 450 and
Nokia
came after with 250 sellings and
Apple
continue in grew and reached 150,
LG
and
ZTE
had not that match changes,
97sales
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for
LG
and 51sales for
ZTE
.
To sum up
, we could say that
Samsung
and
Nokia
brands seem active in the work face in comparison with
Apple
,
LG
, and
ZTE
which have
no
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that active during these years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, samsung, nokia, apple, zte, lg with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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