Whether or not a person achieves their aims in life is mostly related to luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#person #life #luck

Some people think that people set a goal in their

life

and most of all, it is related to

luck

. I completely disagree with

this

statement and I will give my perspective below. In the beginning, according to

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urvey conducted by a local newspaper ‘BULLET TIMES’, approximately 80% respondents

were answer

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‘Yes’ with

this

question ‘Do you always do your best to

achive

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achieve

a goal in your

life

?’.

This

result means people should try an effort for their bright future.

For example

, they are always studying and working hard. I

guarentee

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guarantee

that anyone who does not want a peaceful

life

such

as after retirement because they cannot

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anything if they

does

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not prepare.

Therefore

, people always do their best for their future. They do not pray for

luck

On the other hand

luck

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mportant thing

that

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to arrive final destination. If you got a

lottary

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lottery

, you

wouldnot

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would not

wouldn't

need more

money

and you can enjoy your

life

However

, do you think that

life

will be happy? I cannot agree with that because

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money

come

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to me without my

endervour

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endeavour

that

money

is not mine. It means that

money

can

broke

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your

life

. We saw a lot of news about people who

was

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gonebasement

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one basement

after got a lot of

money

. They spend much

money

more than expected and

finally

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they

bacame

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became

getting a huge dept. I want to be a lucky person but without my effort, I do not want them. In my opinion,

luck

impotant

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important

but more

crucual

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crucial

thing is

endervour

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endeavour

. Without any effort

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you must not want anything. A word I believe strongly is “You can make your own

luck

.”

Therefore

, I always try to my best when I do something. If

god

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has been watched me, he will give to me a present when I work hard.

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