Whether or not a person achieves their aims in life is mostly related to luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that people set a goal in their
life
and most of all, it is related to
luck
. I completely disagree with
this
statement and I will give my perspective below. In the beginning, according to
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urvey conducted by a local newspaper ‘BULLET TIMES’, approximately 80% respondents
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‘Yes’ with
this
question ‘Do you always do your best to
achive
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achieve
a goal in your
life
?’.
This
result means people should try an effort for their bright future.
For example
, they are always studying and working hard. I
guarentee
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guarantee
that anyone who does not want a peaceful
life
such
as after retirement because they cannot
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anything if they
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not prepare.
Therefore
, people always do their best for their future. They do not pray for
luck
.
On the other hand
,
luck
is
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mportant thing
that
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to arrive final destination. If you got a
lottary
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lottery
, you
wouldnot
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would not
wouldn't
need more
money
and you can enjoy your
life
.
However
, do you think that
life
will be happy? I cannot agree with that because
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money
come
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to me without my
endervour
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endeavour
that
money
is not mine. It means that
money
can
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your
life
. We saw a lot of news about people who
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gonebasement
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one basement
after got a lot of
money
. They spend much
money
more than expected and
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they
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became
getting a huge dept. I want to be a lucky person but without my effort, I do not want them. In my opinion,
luck
is
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important
but more
crucual
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crucial
thing is
endervour
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endeavour
. Without any effort
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you must not want anything. A word I believe strongly is “You can make your own
luck
.”
Therefore
, I always try to my best when I do something. If
god
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has been watched me, he will give to me a present when I work hard.
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