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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts give
the
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apply
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information about the percentage of
people
 in America,
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who consuming
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consuming
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consume
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Sodium
, Saturated Fat, and Added
sugar
 in their daily meals.
Overall
, American
people
 have their dinner, which contains
Sodium
 the most, followed by Saturated Fat.
However
, breakfast shows a
balance
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balanced
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 pattern in three nutrients.
Also
,
people
 have their typical meals containing lots of Added
sugar
 in snacks. Looking at the pie charts more closely, the percentage of
people
have
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who have
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 their lunch and dinner consuming more
Sodium
 than Saturated fat, which accounted for 43% and 37%
in
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of
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 dinner, 29% and 26%
in
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of
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 lunch.
Moreover
, the proportion of breakfast consumes three types of nutrients taking up 14% in
Sodium
, and 16% both
in
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apply
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Saturated fat and Added
sugar
.
Last
 but not least, it should be mentioned
about
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apply
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added
sugar
. Added
sugar
 takes up the vast majority of
proportion
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the proportion
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 in snacks,
accounted
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accounting
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 for 42%.
Nevertheless
, the other three meals just take up about 20%
in
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of
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 these nutrients.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, sodium, sugar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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