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The graph below shows the number of tourist visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourist visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 line graph
illistrates
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illustrates
 the number of people, who visit one of a
caribbean
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Caribbean
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island
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islands
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 during a
paricular
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particular
 period of time. There is a considerable increase of travellers visiting
this
 place over
these 7 years period
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this 7 years period
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.
Although
 in the early
period
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 people preferred staying on
island
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the island
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, later it has been changed as most of them used to stay on cruise ships. Between 2010 and 2017, there is a dramatic improvement
of
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in
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 visitors by 2.5
millions
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million
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,
while
 the number of travellers who stay on cruise ships has been rose markedly by 1.5
millions
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million
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. The crowd who used to stay is
plateued
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plateaued
 since 2013, and
this
 shows
slight
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a slight
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 decline
by
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of
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 0.5
millions
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million
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on
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in
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 2016.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
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