You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter - explain why you would like the job - give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ - say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

this

letter to apply as an employee to live with your family for six months and take care of your child. My name is Milav Soni and I am from India.

Firstly

, I would like to describe

you

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reasons

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the reasons

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why I want

this

job. First of all, I really want to work with

international

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an international

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family

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families

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and want to help them in all aspects of life. The reason why I liked it is that I want to learn cultures of diverse countries.

Moreover

, I have been fascinated

about

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Australian

cultures

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culture

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since my childhood.

Secondly

, the reason why I will be a suitable employee for you is that I am

very

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helpful and calm person.

Additionally

, I used to take care of some children of one of the families in Canada

last

year. I really enjoy

to play

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with small kids and I

also

know

variety

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a variety

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of tales.

Furthermore

, I

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also

like to make

baby's

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food. You can

also

check my

customers

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customer's

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reviews

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Social Media. During my free time when I am in Australia, I will go

different

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places in Australia and will take photos of them.

In addition

, I am

also

good at painting, and if you want

then

I will draw pictures of your family. I would be happy to have an opportunity to live with you and your family. I look forward to your reply. Yours faithfully, Milav Soni

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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The Greeting

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