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Many employers believe that good social skills are as important as good qualifications for job success, so they hire people with good social skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, the majority of employers tend to choose
people
 who have good social
skills
 to hire because they think that these
people
 will succeed in their job in the future.
This
 essay agrees that it is better to choose someone with good
life
skills
 and will explain the reasons. First of all, it is worth considering social
skills
 are something, that we must build over a long period of time, since we were children, not simply a short amount of time,
thus
 not everyone has good
life
skills
.
According to
 research by Melbourne University, they found that
people
 who have good
life
skills
 can catch up with those with good qualifications so fast because they are really quick to learn and absorb knowledge and information. Thanks to that, they have excellent
work
 efficiency and contribute a lot to the corporation.
Not to mention
 manual
work
, other jobs need both
life
skills
 and knowledge. If employees lack one, it is so hard to bring quality to the
work
.
Although
 having good qualifications is a required condition, it is not enough. Nowadays,
people
 who have good qualifications tend to study too much and they will prefer to study or
work
 almost all
their
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 time
instead
 of going out and participating in social activities, which results in a lack of social
skills
. Most companies have a dynamic working environment which forces employees to
work
 hard day by day but still
need
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 to behave well to maintain relationships with colleagues
as well as
 managers so if they do not improve their
life
skills
, they will be left behind. In conclusion, I believe that
people
 who have better social
skills
 will have more success in their future
work
 than others because of their
skills
 so I totally agree with the given opinion.
Submitted by maianhdt12 on

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