Many believe that the goal of one’s career should be to pursue a passion while others feel it is merely a way to earn a livelihood.

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the
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asks is "What are you going to study?"
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seniors
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six words will define your future.
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you want your career to be
one
for
passion
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or
one
for
money
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First,
why should you do it for
passion
? Your career is the thing you are going to study for at least four years and that you are going to practice for more than 50 years so it should be something you enjoy and something you are passionate about. Spending your whole
life
doing things you don't like is living a sad
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not enjoying
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life
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one
. It is
also
a
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reality
that we live in a capitalist world where
money
is a key aspect. A capitalist
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thought
taught
is that a
life
without
money
is a
life
without happiness. By
this
train of thinking, what is the purpose of studying for
passion
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level of happiness because of monetary problems
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I am a firm
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believer
that there exists a balance between
passion
and
money
. I do think there is a way to not compromise
one
for the other, you just
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to look for it. Look for the thing that makes you happy, something that you enjoy doing. And if you can find it, try to divide your time. There is no point in having a
life
where you can not have the things you want because of monetary problems.
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