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Question: The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. the table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Question: The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. the table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
police
budget
 and expenses of an area of Britain
is
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are
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 depicted on the table and charts
accordingly
 for 2017 and 2018. As illustrated in the table
police
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police's
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 total
budget
 is increased to 318.6m
form
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from
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 304.7m
of
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in
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 2017. Among sources of
police
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the police
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budget
, the highest increase is
on
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in
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 local taxes from 91.2m to 102.3m. Whilst, National
Governments
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Governments'
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 numbers
as
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for
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biggest
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the biggest
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budget
are
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is
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 175.5m and 177.8m
accordingly
, other resources fund the
police
 by 38m and 38.5m as well. In salary payments,
while
 the salary is the biggest portion of money
spend
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spent
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 in
police
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the police
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 department for both years, the charts depict a considerably smaller percentage in 2018 by 69% when it is compared to 75%
of
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in
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 2017. Technology,
on the other
hand
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 shows an increase from 8% to 14%. Building and transport
remains
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 the same
17
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at 17
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% for both years.
In
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Overall
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overall
, it seems
police
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the police
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 department is more focused on technology improvements in
expense
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the expense
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 of salaries and decided not to make any big
change
Fix the agreement mistake
changes
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on
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to
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 building and transport budgets.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "accordingly".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, budget, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "depicted" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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