it is better for live away from the home during their University studies rather than staying with their parents. to what extent you agree or disagree

#home #university #studies #parents

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the current

scenerio

an outline or synopsis of a play (or, by extension, of a literary work)

scenario

, migrating

to faroff place

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to a far off place

to far off place

to pursue their higher education has become a common trend. On

one

's point of view it's a positive trend

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while others refute it. I definitely believe that

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that moving away from

home

has a positive impact on an individual's personality. To commence with

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there are several

reason

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reasons

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bolster my opinion.

firstly

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Firstly

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there are innumerable case of wherein people from rural village with simple personality have been

molded

shaped to fit by or as if by altering the contours of a pliable mass (as by work or effort)

moulded

into dynamic thinkers and

problem

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Problem

solvers when migrated to developing countries.

moreover

in addition

Moreover

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there are many famous personalities who

had transform

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had transformed

themselves by staying far away from

home

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on their own.

this

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This

genuine prove us that how student's living away from

home

can or has to transform themselves by facing various challenges.

each

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Each

on of us at

one

point of time or the other has to face these difficulties so it is better to face these situations when you are young and energetic.

for

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For

example a

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example, a

survey conducted

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a University in my city reveals that students who developed

holistically where

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holistically, where

holistically were

holistically were were

the ones who lived on the campus.

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other hand

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the other hand

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the students who live away from

home

has their own disadvantages.

one

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One

of the major issue is

home

sick and loneliness which may lead to poor performance in their studies.

likewise

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Likewise

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some students may require parents supervision just to stop them from indulging in any wrong activities. In conclusion

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the

important

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importance

of family cannot be imbued

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But still, it is necessary for students to stay

from

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with

their parents

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students

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Students

who live with their parents are like frogs in a well at

one

point of time they may need to get out well to learn more about life

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it is better for live away from the home during their University studies rather than staying with their parents. to what extent you agree or disagree

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries, a high proportion of criminal acts are committed by teenagers. Why has this happened? What can be done to deal with this?

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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