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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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The given chart depicts the amount of
money
 destined
to
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for
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 the police budget in a particular area of Britain between 2017 to 2018. The information is presented using a chart and a table, which shows how the
money
 was provided and how it was used respectively.
Overall
, it can be seen that in both years, the National Government was the highest source of
money
,
while
 grants were the lowest, We can
also
 see that, the highest amount of
money
 was spent to pay officers and staff salaries in both years.
Initially
,
National
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the National
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 government was the main source of
money
, accounting for almost £180m in both years.
Moreover
, Local taxes presented an increase in number between the time
give
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given
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, consisting of more than £100m.
On the other hand
, when
i
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it
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 comes to how the
money
 was
spend
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spent
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, the main destine was the salary, comprehending around 70% in the given period.
Finally
,
while
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building
 and
transports
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transport
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 remained stable
between
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apply
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the time,
the
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apply
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technology showed a slight increase during the time, even though representing the lowest
money
 destination. In summary, it is possible
to conclude
 that, there were
not
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no
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 significant changes presented in the given period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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