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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 illustration demonstrates the procedure of making instant noodles for
destribution
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distribution
.
Overall
, the main ingredient of
this
 product is wheat flour,
although
 they add
a little bit of
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a few
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 vegetables and spices to get the desired flavour. By combining
with
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it with
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 the oil, we can get the
desires
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 texture and durability. During the procedure, the flour
which
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stored in the siles
mixed
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is mixed
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 with a relevant amount of water and oil using a mixture, and make dough sheets by
the
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rollers.
Then
 these cut
in to
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 strips and
make
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 discs which
combined
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 with cooking oil and allow to dry. After
that
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 the dried goods
put
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in to
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into
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the
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a
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 cup
salong
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along
 with the vegetables and spices. As the final step sealing of the containers and
lebelling
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labelling
 take place
,
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 and
prepare
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preparation
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 for
destribution
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distribution
.
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