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Some people think that the teenager’s years are the happiest times of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Nowadays, there has been a debate surfacing regarding the most cheerful
time
 a human lives in his lifespan.
This
 includes teenage
life
 and
also
adult
life
. Albeit there are many people who say that they experienced the best
time
 in
adult
life
, proponents argue that
this
 is not the case. I will be discussing both views and give my opinion The teenage
time
 of a person
according to
 me is the most wonderful. There are very few responsibilities that an individual has to bear when he is a teen. To give an eminent example, when I was 16, I just had to worry about my studies and the sports that I used to play at the
time
 which gave me lots of joy and
also
 kept my stress levels at a low resulting in very less anxiety compared to what I experience now in my 20's. A teen has a lot of friends and all the
time
 in the world to do lots of activities.
Moreover
, a teen spends a considerable amount of
time
 with his or her family and takes part in all activities going on in the household. The
adult
time
 of
life
 is no joke as there
is
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 a lot of burdens on the shoulders of an
adult
.
For instance
, an
adult
 starts to earn money and takes care of his or her spouse which is a huge commitment. An average
adult
 most of the
time
 works at a company. The firm employs the individual and expects them to work and get things done. To give you an idea, my mother tells me about the work-
life
 balance my father and when she compares their
time
 when they were teens, there is a massive difference, like getting food on the table and working tirelessly for the children. In conclusion, to give my opinion, Teenage
life
 gives more joy and
that is
 the
time
 when everyone should have new experiences and meet new pupils because it's the
time
 when a person is full of
life
 and energetic.
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