The chart below compares the percentage of time Australian mothers and fathers spent helping the children with four activities in 2013
The bar chart demonstrated the proportion of
time
that Australian parents
allocate for
supporting their child in four different activities in 2013.
Change preposition
to
Overall
, It can be obvious that the participation of mothers was more recognized than fathers in all survey lists. While
parents
spent the highest percentage on having joy with their children
, Australian fathers chose to assist them with their assignments.
Looking at the chart for more detail, time
spent by mothers helping their children
choose clothes accounted for 75% and was the largest data, while
fathers only spent a small fraction (2%) on these activities. Besides
, homework accounted for the largest proportion of children
of the breadwinner, which was one in ten, compared to the man, the spending of the woman in the family used 60% of time
Correct pronoun usage
their time
to explain
the homework to the Change the verb form
explaining
children
. Both parents
spent a
half of their Remove the article
apply
time
for
dressing, Change preposition
apply
whereas
figures for homework were nearly 38%.
From the rest of the chart, playing games and going to bed used the same data about 4% each. Meanwhile, having fun and preparing for sleep witnessed
at 25% and about 42%, respectively. Add a missing verb
were witnessed
Finally
, children
's bedtime received 50% of the time
support from their parents
, especially hitting the highest time
both mothers and father
together shared 70% Fix the agreement mistake
fathers
time
with their son and daughter.Change preposition
of time
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