The chart below compares the percentage of time Australian mothers and fathers spent helping the children with four activities in 2013

The chart below compares the percentage of time Australian mothers and fathers spent helping the children with four activities in 2013
The bar chart demonstrated the proportion of
time
that Australian
parents
allocate
for
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supporting their child in four different activities in 2013.
Overall
, It can be obvious that the participation of mothers was more recognized than fathers in all survey lists.
While
parents
spent the highest percentage on having joy with their
children
, Australian fathers chose to assist them with their assignments. Looking at the chart for more detail,
time
spent by mothers helping their
children
choose clothes accounted for 75% and was the largest data,
while
fathers only spent a small fraction (2%) on these activities.
Besides
, homework accounted for the largest proportion of
children
of the breadwinner, which was one in ten, compared to the man, the spending of the woman in the family used 60% of
time
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to explain
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the homework to the
children
. Both
parents
spent
a
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half of their
time
for
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dressing,
whereas
figures for homework were nearly 38%. From the rest of the chart, playing games and going to bed used the same data about 4% each. Meanwhile, having fun and preparing for sleep
witnessed
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at 25% and about 42%, respectively.
Finally
,
children
's bedtime received 50% of the
time
support from their
parents
, especially hitting the highest
time
both mothers and
father
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fathers
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together shared 70%
time
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of time
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with their son and daughter.
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