You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment.

Dear Sir, I’m writing
this
letter with regards to my disappointment about the external hard disk which I
purchaged
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purchased
from your shop
last
week
on Monday.The files are not opening
in
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the hard disk.
Last
week
, I had the opportunity to visit your store, and I decided to buy a black projector. It was working smoothly until yesterday when I wanted to
double check
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before attending the presentation next
week
, but when I pressed the power button, it just came up with a black screen without any pictures. Next
week
, I will have a presentation. It is very important to me. Because it is my final text. I spent a lot of time preparing. I need a projector to assist me in displaying some information and video
while
I am speaking. It
help
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my speech
esier
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easier
for everyone to understand.
Furthermore
, it will help me get a high score on
this
text I would be grateful if you could come and check the equipment at my home, or replace it with new equipment. I look forward to hearing you soon. thank you. Yours faithfully,
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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