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Some believe that students should begin learning a language very early in school while others think these subjects should be taught later. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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It is believed that learning a new
language
 depends on the time when
children
 start to learn, and it is argued whether is better to start learning, early at
school
 or later. Personally, I think that it is better to learn early, and I will discuss both sides and explain my reasons in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, the ability of
children
 to learn new things is very high in primary
school
 and it is a piece of cake to learn a new
language
 for
children
.
For example
,
children
 whose parents moved to a foreign country adapted fast and started to speak a foreign
language
 like a native,
while
 their parents could not pronounce some words well in a foreign
language
.
Moreover
,
children
 are curious in primary
school
 and they are interested in everything around them.
Therefore
, they feel like an adventure to learn a new
language
 and do not get bored. It is easy to teach
children
 using different kinds of games. They accept learning a new
language
 as a funny game.
On the other hand
, some believe that learning early a new
language
 can lead to some complications
such
 as forgetting a
mother
tongue
 or mixing languages.
For instance
, when
children
 start to learn new words in their
mother
tongue
 and add a new
language
, they can mix words from their
mother
tongue
 into another
language
.
As a result
,
children
 could not be fluent in their
mother
tongue
 or foreign
language
.
Therefore
, people believe that it is better to start learning a new
language
 later when they will be fluent in their
mother
tongue
 and will be ready to learn a new
language
.
Furthermore
, some think that
children
 could be under stress
due to
 learning a new
language
 at primary
school
 and might have mental health problems.
Although
 there are some reasons on both sides, who support learning a
language
 very early and later, personally I believe that it is better to learn at primary
school
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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