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The map below changes that occurred to a town named Willington in 1780, 1860 and 2000.

#changes #town #willington
The maps
shows
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 the changes that happened between the years 1780, 1860 and 2000, in a
town
 named
willington
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Willington
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. On every
map
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 we can see some differences, and adjustments that happened to the
town
. In 1780 the
town
 had a road,
as well as
 the other
two
 years we are comparing the
town
 with. But there are
also
 differences,
for example
, there were four farms, in comparison with the year 1860
that
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when
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 there were
two
less
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 farms, and in 2000 that
were
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 none. The woods
area
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are
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also
 was less on every year, until 2000
where
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when
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 it was left with none as well.
On the other hand
, the home's quantity grew through the years, in 1780 the
town
 had 100 homes, in 1860 had homes, and in 2000 had 500 homes. The quantity grew and the home area grew with it. In both maps, 1860 and 2000, we can see a bridge that wasn't on the first map of 1780. On the map of the year
2000
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 we can see the most changes, there are
two
 schools and
tree
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three
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 sports fields, five shops, one wetland for birds, and an extra road that we can’t see on the other
two
 maps.
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