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Many employers believe that good social skills are as important as good qualifications for job success, so they hire people with good social skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, the majority of employers tend to choose
people
 who have good social
skills
 to hire because they think that these
people
 will succeed in their job in the future.
This
 essay agrees that it is better to choose someone with good
life
skills
 and will explain the reasons. First of all, it is worth considering social
skills
 are something, that we must build over a long period of time, since we were children, not simply a short amount of time,
thus
 not everyone has good
life
skills
.
According to
 research by Melbourne University, they found that
people
 who have good
life
skills
 can catch up with those with good qualifications so fast because they are really quick to learn and absorb knowledge and information. Thanks to that, they have excellent
work
 efficiency and contribute a lot to the corporation.
Not to mention
 manual
work
, other jobs need both
life
skills
 and knowledge. If employees lack one, it is so hard to bring quality to the
work
.
Although
 having good qualifications is a required condition, it is not enough. Nowadays,
people
 who have good qualifications tend to study too much and they will prefer to study or
work
 almost all
their
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the
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 time
instead
 of going out and participating in social activities, which results in a lack of social
skills
. Most companies have a dynamic working environment which forces employees to
work
 hard day by day but still
need
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 to behave well to maintain relationships with colleagues
as well as
 managers so if they do not improve their
life
skills
, they will be left behind.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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