The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the proportion of two genders in one Asian country who succeeded in acquiring their driving permit from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
, there was an increase in the percentage of women and men who successfully completed their driving test throughout the years examined.
In addition
, women's figures remained the highest despite the negligible decline in the latter half of the period. In 1980, the proportion of female candidates who were able to pass the driving test started at about 48%, after which it experienced a marginal rise to around 52% in the following decade. It is notable that the figure for
this
reached a peak of approximately 69% in 2000, before ending the period with a slight decrease to 65%. 28% of candidates who triumphed in the driving exam were men, with a subsequent increase from 38% to nearly 50% in 1990 and 2000, respectively.
In addition
, the figures for
this
plateaued in the decade from 2000 to 2010. Despite significant changes throughout the past 30 years, the percentage of men passing their driving test was consistently lower than that of women.
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