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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future devlopment of the site. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future devlopment of the site. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate industrial development in Narbition
,
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 and
also
 show the plans for the near future. Based on those planned are include various areas
such
 as factories, and housing. To start with, Norbition industrial area currently is mainly of factory buildings and the majority is in the east part which is including 5 towers ,and in the north 1 tower, and approximately 2 towers on the west
side
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However
, the total
the
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factory is 8 buildings which are located along the
side
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the river and opposite with farmland. With regard to, planned future development will
has
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 a huge
changing
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,
Overall
 it is can be observed that
factory
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the factory
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 industry is replaced by mostly housing for 7 places,
playground
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a playground
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in
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 the east
side
, and shops and
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medical centre in the south area.
Moreover
, in the near future plan will have a school
in
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 the east
side
 of the residential area. Interestingly, the roads will be developed
cross
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 the river to join another residential part.
On the other hand
, the farmland's scale will be
reducing
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 on the east
side
.
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