The line graph illustrates three different kind of crimes that occurred in Newport city centre between 2003 and 2012.

The line graph illustrates three different kind of crimes that occurred in Newport city centre between 2003 and 2012.
On the
line
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,line
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graph
bellow
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below
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you can see 3 different types of
crime
that
ocurred
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occurred
in the
cityof
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city of
Newport
since
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from
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2003 to 2012. To summarize on the
line
graph
we can see 3 types of crimes, Burglar, car theft,
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and Robbery
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Robbery
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and Robbery
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. The
year
2004 was the highest criminal activity that
ocurred
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occurred
in Newport. 3500 houses were robbed, more than 2500 cars were stolen, and 500 people were victims of
robbery
.
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,Meanwhile
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on
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in
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the
year
2005
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,2005
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the
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crimes decreased a lot 3000 hosses got robbed, less than 2500 were stolen and
last
but not least
amout
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amount
of
crime
was
the
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in the
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year
2012. In
this
year
the
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crime
decreased a large amount. More than 1500 houses got robbed, 2000 cars were stolen and less than 500 were victims of
robbery
.
Overall
on the
graph
line
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we can see
the
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that
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the
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crime
rate has
change
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changed
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a lot over the years in the city of Newport. In just 9 years, the Burglary went
of
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from
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3500 to 1000, the car theft number decreased a lot, and the
Robbery
is mostly the same
those
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in those
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9 years.
Last
but not least the
graph
line
shows
as
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the
crime
rate
betwen
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between
2003-2012 in which the
year
2004 was the most dangerous
year
of all. With more than 3500 houses robbed, 2500 cars stolen and 500 people were victims of
robbery
.
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