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The graph below shows UK acid rain emissions, measured in millions of tonnes, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007.

The graph below shows UK acid rain emissions, measured in millions of tonnes, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007.
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The given line graph below illustrates UK acid rain
emissions
, measured in
millions
 of
tonnes
, from four different
sectors
 from 1990 to 2007.
Overall
, it can clearly be seen that the
emissions
 rates from
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the eceltricity
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eceltricity
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electricity
, gas and water supply sector
was
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 the highest at
start
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the start
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 of the period,
then
 decreased dramatically throughout
given
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 period. Meanwhile, the
emissions
 rates of other
sectors
 remained stable. In terms of the sector providers with the highest and the lowest
emissions
 rates, the electricity, gas and water supply
sectors
 stood at a peak
just
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 below 3.5
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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tonnes
 in 1991. It
then
 went down significantly to 0.5
millions
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million
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of
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tonnes
 in 2007. Meanwhile, the domestic
sectors
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sector
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 was the smallest at
start
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the start
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 just above 0.5
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million
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millions
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million
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of
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tonnes
,
then
 it decreased slightly
approximately
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to approximately
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 0.3
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million
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millions
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million
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of
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apply
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tonnes
in
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at
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 the end of
given
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a given
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 period. Regarding
to
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apply
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the other
sectors
,
the
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transport and communication stood at about 0.7
millions
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million
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of
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tonnes
 in 1991,
then
 it remained stable throughout the year until it overlapped the electricity, gas and water supply
sectors
 in 2003 and it experienced a
slightly
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slight
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 increase before experiencing a slight decrease at around 0.7
millions
 of
tonnes
.
On the other hand
, the other industries stood
just
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at just
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 above 2
millions
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million
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of
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tonnes
. It
then
 dropped dramatically over the years until it reached a minimum
around
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of around
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 1.3
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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tonnes
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, millions, tonnes, sectors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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