The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.  

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart compares the numbers of open shops and closed stores in one specific country over a period of 8 years, from 2011 to 2018. It was evident that there were more open stores than closed ones in 2011,
while
the situation diversified in 2018.
Moreover
, it was noticeable that In 2015, the boutique which opened are far fewer than the shop stoppage. There were more than 8000 shops opening in 2011,
whereas
the figure for termination was only approximately 6400.
However
, the number of shop terminations overtook the closed ones in 2012, and kept the leading role until 2018, with the exception of 2015. In 2015, the number of shop openings was nearly fifth as large as close ones.
In addition
, the year 2014 saw the least gap between boutique termination and openings, at fewer than 500.
Finally
, there were 2000 more supermarkets closing in 2018
instead
of opening.
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