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You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter explain why you think you would be suitable for the job say what else you could do for the family give your reasons for wanting the job Write at least 150

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Dear Mrs zhang I am writing to apply for the Chinese teacher that you posted
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BabyTree
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 website My name is Lin Wang, I studied
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 PHD
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 Education
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 University of Sydney for 2 years. Before I came to
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Australia, I used to be an English teacher
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 the local primary school (. In terms of my personality,I am outgoing and humorous. I can easily get n wed with the Children and make their study process more interesting and
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.
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 can manage your vacancy.
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 student at
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 moment, I only allow
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 less than 20 hours per week. I'll try my best to teach your children more than your expected. Not only for the Chinese but
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 can learn Something about
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Chinese
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 and history. In my spare time, if you don't mind I can take them to do some outdoor activities to
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enhance
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 their cooperation skills I really need
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 job, because my parents are more than 60 years.I have to earn my living costs by myself. I am
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 if you could give me
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 opportunity. Look forward to your reply! Yours Faithfully Lin Wang
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