you are a college student in and English-speaking country. You are unhappy with your rented accommodation so you have to request college accomodation. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter Introduce yourself Why you are unhappy with rented accommodation Why you believe college accommodation is better for you

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Hello. I am writing a letter to request my new

accomondation

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school for next semester. I am Hera, a freshman

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London

college

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. I am from Korea. I am really happy here and

saticefied

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satisfied

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new life except

new

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room. Actually, I am living

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rented house which I found before arriving. My rented house is too far from

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school. It takes 1.5 hours from the college. I know that many students want to live in college

accomondation

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. but I

am truly need

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new

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place to live. If I can stay in there, I can focus on

study

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more without

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wastes

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of time on the road. You might get these kinds of

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the letter

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letter

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a lot. I hope you consider

about

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my situation and let me know

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answer.

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sincerely Hera

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