you are a college student in and English-speaking country. You are unhappy with your rented accommodation so you have to request college accomodation. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter Introduce yourself Why you are unhappy with rented accommodation Why you believe college accommodation is better for you

Hello. I am writing a letter to request my new
accomondation
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of
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this
school for next semester. I am Hera, a freshman
of
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at

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London
college
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College

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. I am from Korea. I am really happy here and
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satisfied

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with my

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new life except
new
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the new

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room. Actually, I am living
a
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in a

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rented house which I found before arriving. My rented house is too far from
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school. It takes 1.5 hours from the college. I know that many students want to live in college
accomondation
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accommodation

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. but I
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new
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a new

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place to live. If I can stay in there, I can focus on
study
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more without
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any

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wastes
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waste

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of time on the road. You might get these kinds of
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the letter
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letter
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letters

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a lot. I hope you consider
about
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apply

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my situation and let me know
positive
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answer.
your
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yours

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sincerely Hera
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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