In today's competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents to go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents' absence. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#world #families #parents #work #say #children #benefit #income #lack #support #absence

Today our work and our lifestyle force us to multitask and do something every minute of our life. So, many families try to keep

the

Correct article usage

show examples

balance between their work and raising their

children

. They choose to delegate the responsibility for

children

to their elder

children

or to a nurse or even maybe to a computer. But what influence of

this

type of upbringing have on

children

? On the one hand, in

this

kind of situation,

children

don’t have enough attention and support from their

parents

This

is why, kids may become angry and uncontrollable to get

this

much-needed attention from adults. But in my opinion, it may be corrected by a child’s hobby or by “personal child time” when

parents

give all attention only to their

children

. And friends can be good support for coping too.

Although

, sometimes it may get worse and the kid’s behaviour has to be fixed by professionals, like psychologists.

On the other hand

, the absence of adults has some bright advantages.

For example

, these

children

become more responsible faster than the

children

whose

parents

try to control and fix their every step.

Also

, they should know how to communicate with different people because they don’t have

parents

near them in every difficult situation. So these kids end up growing up sociable and flexible and these skills are really important for today. They have role models of their family members who have work and private life and because of that

children

can start their careers earlier than others and can balance their work-life balance better than others. To sum it up, there are many opinions and many sides to

this

question. It is

also

absolutely unreal to account for the influence. But, I believe that it is individual because for some

children

this

situation may bring a lot of advantages and they may acquire new skills along the way. But for some

children

, it may be trauma and they start to cope with

this

(??) in a different way and it may have good and

also

bad consequences.

Submitted by nikolettliny on Tue Apr 18 2023

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

6.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

Include an introduction and conclusion

Support main points with an explanation and then an example

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms

Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 7.0

Answer all parts of the question

Present and fully explain ideas

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Word count

Become Premium

Check as many essays as you want
Analyze highlighted mistakes
Use the built-in grammar checker
Discover your weaknesses
Get suggestions to get a higher score
Browse the history of checked essays
14-day money back guarantee

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

6
band
In recent years children have been given more freedom than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give your opinion and examples.
As the society in the present world is increasing with well educated civilians, children of those civilized people are enjoying more freedom in their choice of life which was exactly opposite in the past. Depending on the degree of freedomness, it has positive development towards a child's future as well as damaging effects in their whole life. In this essay, I will discuss both views and give my own opinion on why a child has to be restrained under a certain level about their choice.
5.5
band
some people think that sports involving violence and martial arts to be banned from tv and competitions, to what extend do you agree?
Sports are so vital for every individual as some individuals think that some sports like martial arts should be banned from social sites and competitions. In my opinion, I totally disagree with this as every person have their own skills in certain things.
7
band
Some people have the same type of job throughout their lifetime, while others prefer to change the type of job they do. Discuss why people choose to do both and give your opinio
Adults spend the majority of their day at work and while some incline towards the same occupation throughout their lives, others prefer switching professions for better career prospects; I, personally, support the latter view.
4
band
In most of the socities,the role of mother and father differs.what are the causes of this differences? What will be the parental role in future?
Families are the building block of society. Both genders play a part and parcel role in a healthy family, with different responsibilities. There are myraid reasons why these differences are and according to me there will be huge differences in the parenthood.
7
band
Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?
It is argued by some that living in a house is less advantageous as compared to staying in an apartment. Although staying in a home gives more status and class, however, living in a block of flats is far less expensive in the long run.

In today's competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents to go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents' absence. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

In recent years children have been given more freedom than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give your opinion and examples.

some people think that sports involving violence and martial arts to be banned from tv and competitions, to what extend do you agree?

Some people have the same type of job throughout their lifetime, while others prefer to change the type of job they do. Discuss why people choose to do both and give your opinio

In most of the socities,the role of mother and father differs.what are the causes of this differences? What will be the parental role in future?

Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?