Some people believe that It is good to Share as much information as possible in Scientific Research business and the academic World. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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and
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as
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goes by. Some
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that it is pleasing to have
knowledge
in all fields, whilst others think that some facts are significant to be distributive. In
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I will discuss both views and try to give my
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opinion
opinin'
. Thanks to the development of technology which gives the
oppurtunity
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opportunity
of handling any kind of
information
whenever you want. A growing number of people feel that it is stunning to enhance your
knowledge
through shareable facts by
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, successful
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or a professor in an elite university. Take
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as an example. University students can read articles from
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lecturers
lectures
all around the world
along with
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knowledge
or skills that would be useful in their future job
oppurtunities
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opportunities
.
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not have the chance of getting
information
themselves so
this
is the only way of learning . There is
also
an argument that some reports are precious or secret to be shared. They feel that it would have a negative impact. A good example of
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would be Scientific scientific Intelligence. Telling
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ordinary people about the process of making
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would be a disaster
consequently
; it is the kind that should be hidden from citizens.
Additionally
, in the business department if a businessman
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news it could be the biggest mistake of his life. As you give the possibility to your competitor to learn the ropes from your own mouth and in some cases it may beat you and makes you become bankrupt. In conclusion,
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person during
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life
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is better to collect
information
as much as possible. These days it is not
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task to expand
knowledge
in Scientific, business and academic parts. In my view, these categories are not serious enough at which point their wisdom had better be
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controlled
and in my
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it's
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benefit
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outweigh any negatives.
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