The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
The given pie charts illustrate the average proportions of
sodium
, saturated fats and added sugars in breakfast
, lunch
, dinner
and snacks
consumed in the USA.
Overall
, both sodium
and saturated fat are intake
most in Change the noun form
intakes
dinner
while
the figure of added sugar takes up the
most part of Correct article usage
apply
snacks
.
To begin
with, the percentage of the consumption of sodium
during dinner
is the highest among all 43%, followed by 29% in lunch
. The figure for sodium
consumed in snacks
and breakfast
are
same at 14%. Change the verb form
is
Secondly
, similar to sodium
, the proportion of saturated fat intake in dinner
is larger than others at 37%. The average percentages of consumption of saturated fat in lunch
, snacks
and breakfast
range
are 26%, 21% and 16% successively. Fix the agreement mistake
ranges
Lastly
, the figure for added sugar consumed ranges from 16% in breakfast
to 42% in snacks
. while
the proportions of added sugar intake in
Change preposition
at
dinner
and lunch
are 23% and 19% respectively.Submitted by 18701001331 on
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