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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarize this information by selecting and reporting the main feautures and make comparison where relevant.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarize this information by selecting and reporting the main feautures and make comparison where relevant.
#show #temperatures #hours #sunshine #year #three #cities #information #feautures #comparison
The graph and table charts give information that the
temperatures'
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temperatures
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differenciations
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differentiations
differentiation
 per month and the amounts of hours of
sunshine
 per year in three
cities
such
 as
London
, New
york
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York
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 and
Sydney
. From the graph, we can know when was the highest climate through annual in three
cities
 and New
york
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York
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 was the most
sunshine
 city among these
cities
.
Firstly
, in the line graph, in July, New
York
 and
London
 was the hottest season relative to
Sydney
.
Sydney
 was the coldest in July.
Also
, the
chages
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changes
charges
of
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in
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 temperatures
was
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shown
London
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in London
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 and New
York
 were
same
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the same
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 patterns like increasing climate and peak at in July,
after
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and after
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that
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,that
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 they
were
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apply
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decreased in December. But, the city of
Sydney
 showed the reverse
patterns
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pattern
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. It
was
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decreased and the lowest in July and
rised
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raised
rose
rise
 up in December.
Lastly
, to see a table, among three countries, the hours of
sunshine
, New
York
 was the
most
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apply
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shineest
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shiniest
cities
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city
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.
Although
London
 was the second higher temperature in July,
total
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the total
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 annual times of
sunshine
was
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were
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 the lowest.
To sum up
, New
york
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York
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was
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apply
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peaked at
the
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its
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 highest climate in July and had the longest
sunshine
 hours.
Besides
,
London
 had the lowest
daylights
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daylight
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 and
Sydney
 had a
little
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few
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 temperature
changes
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change
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 between them.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sunshine, cities, london, york, sydney with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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