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about your level. Write something about yourself do you agree?

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Nowadays, with the increasing development of competition,
people
 are easy to get into struggling when faced with
the
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difficulties. Some
people
 hold the view that you have better
to
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accept a bad truth
such
 as an unhappy job or a
ficancial
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financial
situation
,
while
 others suggest you should find
your
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 way to make your
situation
 improve. In my eyes, I
agree
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 latter argument.
Firstly
, it has been argued why I think it is better to improve your
situation
. Admittedly, accepting the truth has in many ways enriched
people
's lives.
For example
, one famous
Canadan
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Canadian
 artist once
said''Given
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said given
 what happened was the past already, Just accept it and regard it as a destiny. Once you cherish what you have, you will be
grudually
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gradually
 relaxed and less
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.''
Moreover
,
although
 the positive aspects of accepting the
situation
 must be taken into account, I still believe there are more benefits
from
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 changing your
situation
.
For instance
, one recent article published in Nelson Magazine revealed that improving the status plays a vital role
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 finding the motivation of your life.
Besides
, as long as your vibe is getting better, your mood will be definitely much better.
In other words
, when you overcome your difficulty, you can enjoy
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 sense of achievement. It is
thus
 clearly shown that boosting your status is quite beneficial.
To sum up
, I think the advantages of improving your
situation
outweight
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outweigh
 the benefits of accepting the truth. In order to address
this
 issue,
people
 should try their best to find a solution for a better
situation
.
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