The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish.
The diagram illustrates the life cycle of 
salmon
 from the spawning period to adultness, 
Overall
, it can be clearly seen the detailed phases that salmon
 undergo in order to ensure the life process, from the spawning stage
 in the river to  the growth stage
 in the ocean,
Glancing at the diagram reveals that salmon
 migrates to the river in order to incubate the eggs, prior to this
 stage
, the spawning period is the first phase, following to 
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this
,  after the salmon
 eggs hatch the next  stage
 is rearing in the river where the water is suitable for this
 first adventure, at this
 point
 the Add a comma
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salmon
 migrates back to the ocean before which lives a stage
 named ESTUARY REARING, finally
, the last
 2 stages are reaching the rearing nets, subsequently
 salmon
 remain in these areas to grow to maturity in order to start over the same life cycle from the beginning,Submitted by creativedesign1a9 on 
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