The bar chart compares the proportion of 4 divers transportations usage throughout the commuting to work in one of European city in 3 separate years 1960, 1980 and 2000. The unit is measured in the percentage.

The bar chart compares the proportion of 4 divers transportations usage throughout the commuting to work in one of European city in 3 separate years 1960, 1980 and 2000. The unit is measured in the percentage.
The bar chart provides the information of percentage of using transport modes by different automobiles
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as bus ,car,bike and by foot in three separate years 1960,1980 and 2000.
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, the usage of cars increased gradually throughout the years.
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the proportion by
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is higher at the beginning of the period it declined by the end of the period to the lowest. Usage of Bus fluctuated between the years.
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was around 25% in 1960
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after it rose to more than the quarter and it declined in 2000 to almost 15%.Preference
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cars gradually increased and it was the highest in 2000 contributing more than 35%. The percentage of usage of bikes and by walk dramatically declined.Bikes contributed around 25% at the start of the period and they declined to 20% and almost 7% in 1980 and 2000 respectively.The proportion by foot was highest at the start of the year 1960 ,it dipped to 17% in 1980 and
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around 9% in 2000.
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