The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the process of making
sugar
from
sugar
cane.
Overall
, the process includes 7 steps from growing
sugar
cane plants to drying and cooling the extracted
sugar
.
Firstly
,
sugar
cane is planted and grown in fertile agricultural land, it takes about 12 to 18 months for the plants to reach the growth for harvesting. When the plants have reached maturity they are harvested either by the human workforce or in large agricultural land, with the help of harvesting tractors. Later these harvested canes are passed through machines which squeeze the juice from the plant.
Consequently
, the extracted liquid is passed through a funnel made of a limestone filter for purification and separating dirt and solid material.
Subsequently
,
this
juice is heated at a high temperature for the water to evaporate and turn to a syrup-like form.
Then
this
syrup is centrifuged leading to the separation of
sugar
crystals from the evaporated product. The
last
step in
this
process is drying and cooling the crystals giving the final product as
sugar
.
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