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The maps below show an idustrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

The maps below show an idustrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.
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The map depicts the development which occurs in the town of Norbiton
at
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an industrial areas
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industrial areas
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. It is clear from the graph
the
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 capacity of industrial areas will increase through
the buildings construction
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the construction of the building
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.
According to
 what is shown , The middle part of
industrial
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the industrial
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 station will
development
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 entirely .In
north
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the north
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 area and near to the
farm land
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farmland
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 the new houses will construct .
While
 in
north west
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 the factory will be replaced by huge famous shops .
Also
 ,
the
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 opposite side of the shops is the
medicine
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 centre .
On the other hand
 ,the play grand will be between two houses ,and the factory going to convert into
the
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a
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 school in the east region
weather
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whether
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 the town which is located
in
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west
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the west
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 side will remain
un
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in
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 touch in
future
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the future
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 development of the industrial . The house will be
in
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alongside
of
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the main road in the south .
In
addition
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 there will be
extension
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an extension
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 between
north
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the north
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 and west side .
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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