The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
A graph displayed an increase in tourism to a specific
island
in the Carribeans between 2010 and 2017. The line graphs compared those who visited on cruise ships with others who stayed on the
island
.
Overall
, the destination enjoyed a significant upward trend in its tourism during a
seven year
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period. Both, the total numbers of people, and those coming by boat increased three times and quadrupled respectively. Those preferring to stay on the
island
itself remained relatively stable. As mentioned, visitors who journeyed on cruises saw a steep and steady rise after 2012 which was the trough of the curve with 0.2
million
. After that, the graph markedly rose till its peak
at the end
of the documented period in 2017 to 2
million
.
Likewise
, the
overall
statistic had its sharpest upward movement after 2012, levelling off for one year between 2015 and 2016 before skyrocketing to 3.5
million
people.
This
respresents
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represents
an astronomical 350% increase.
In contrast
to
this
, travellers staying on the
island
had a short but sharp climb for one year before levelling off to a steady state for three years at around 1.5
million
. Between 2015 and 2016 numbers decreased slightly but were on the rise again
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2017.
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