The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
this
diagram illustrates information about the process of sugar
and how it is produced by the cane
.
Firstly
, canes need to grow up for 12 to 18 months, only then
harvested by people or machines. Secondly
, the special machine crushes sugar
cane
into juice
, and then
the juice
will purify by a limestone filter. Thirdly
, purifying juice
will become syrup by heating, after that separating sugar
crystals from the syrup. Finally
, sugar
crystals are through dring and cooling so that we can gain sugar
which we see every day.
Overall
, there are seven steps to produce sugar
from cane
including growing, harvesting, crushing, purifying juice
, evaporating, centrifuging, drying and cooling. The process is beginning with the cane
growing and end with drying and cooling.Submitted by cleoovo on
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, cane, juice with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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