Some people think that the government should use extra money to fund programs to improve the environment. Others think that it is better for the government to spend money to support artistic programs. Which option do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

With the increasing abundance of material life,
people
's demand for a better spiritual is growing.
As a result
, some
people
believe the official should invest more in the artistic field
while
others consider those environmental
perservation
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preservation
programs
need more support. I agree with the latter
viewpoint
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because investing more in
environment related
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environment-related
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projects can benefit more individuals than funding artistic projects and they are beneficial for sustainable
development
. I will illustrate some examples to prove my view
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essay.
To begin
with, environmental quality is closely linked with everyone's life, it can seriously affect our
healthy
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and life span.
For instance
, when
the
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time goes back to 2008, the
air
condition of Beijing was terrible, with a high concentration of PM2.5 in the
air
,
according to
a study, there were millions of
people
suffered
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from respiratory diseases
due to
the
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air
pollution, the reason
about
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it was
people
in northern China using thermal power for heating in winter
unrestrictly
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unrestrictedly
unrestricted
, which emitted tons of ashy into
air
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the air
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. Afterwards, it was valued by the government, and officials decided to push some
environmantal
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environmental
programs
, nowadays,
people
in Beijing breathe clean
air
and live healthier than before. Sadly, investing in art cannot improve
people
's health in
this
regard.
On the other hand
, improving
environment
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is able to meet the needs of the present without compromising the ability of future generations,
this
concept
also known
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as sustainable
development
.
For example
, as the extensive forestation, soil desertification accompanies
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water resource
losing
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has posed a threat to our descendants.
Thus
,
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support for
environmental
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the environmental
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program
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programs
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has
positive
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a positive
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impact on sustainable
development
,
while
fund
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art
programs
does
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not have
this
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advantages
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. In conclusion, administrations
pour
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more funds to
environmant
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environmental
related
programs
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can improve our surroundings which is conducive to our health,
moreover
, it takes
advantages
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advantage
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to
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sustainable
development
. These two reasons can not be replaced by
art
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project
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projects
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, and
this
is why I prefer government investment in
environmental related
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environmental-related
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programs
.
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