The charts show the percentage of boys and girls aged 5-14 taking part in cultural activities and sports in Australia in 2003.

The charts show the percentage of boys and girls aged 5-14 taking part in cultural activities and sports in Australia in 2003.
the bar graph illustrates the proportion of 5-14 - year-old
boys
and
girls
taking part in different organized cultural activities and organized sports in Australia in the year 2003.
overall
,
while
a majority of
girls
participated in the dancing activity in the surveyed year, the figure for
boys
was significantly high in the organized sport. remarkably, only a meagre percentage of
boys
partook in cultural activities. looking at detail, the category of
boys
aged 5-14 years old taking part in drama, dancing and singing took up approximately 4%,
whereas
over 15% of
boys
were recorded to play musical instruments. the figure for
girls
in dancing activity hit its peak of a quarter, whilst a similar percentage of
girls
participated in drama and singing activities, accounting for 5%. 10% of
girls
took part in the activity of playing musical instruments in the given year. in terms of organised sport, the figure for
boys
aged 5-14 years old reached roughly 70%, which was far higher than the participation of
girls
, taking up 52%.
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