In some countries, it can be difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience. What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it?

In many places, older
people
are having trouble getting hired for a work position even if they are more than qualified. Humanity every century is wanting to get rid of older
people
when they do not need them. I will discuss the root cause of
this
problem and what actions should be taken. I think that the major and biggest reason for
this
problem is the mentality which we have toward older
people
. We always tend to believe that old
people
are not good for jobs where they need to work physically. Going
further
, there are numerous reasons behind
this
thinking,
for example
, we know that it's hard for them to work at a pace which matches their younger friends.
Moreover
, they are more likely to have a muscle-related injury because of their age.
However
, we always forgot that they have expertise in a job which they are doing for the past 10, 20 or 30 years, which means for them the probability to do the thing right on the first chance is high.
Additionally
, they are less likely to be injured from a job which they already know. Obviously, companies should make a department where they only hire elder
people
for their guidance. The government should
also
step in to save numerous kinds of jobs in various industries for
this
age group of
people
, where they can utilise their experience. In the conclusion, I would like to say that, without a doubt, the above mention points definitely help us in resolving
this
issue.
Apart from
this
we
also
need to change our minds about their age and
need
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think about their experience whenever we hire them.
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