The personal information of many individuals is held by large internet companies and organisations. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is common for companies to ask for staff or customers' personal

information

such

as passport ID, driving licence and bank details and save it on their cloud data or on the system.

Therefore

, the question arises whether our personal

information

is safe. I believe that

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the cons outweigh the pros,

hence

this

essay we will discuss these and

thus

, come up with a reasoned conclusion.

Firstly

, we look at some of the advantages of providing private details. It is convenient to have your

information

stored in the system for future reference because it is a hassle to carry a hard copy of your passport or date of birth with us all the time.

Moreover

, there is a risk of losing the hard copy as well,

as a result

, it is beneficial to have them stored and available whenever it is needed.

For example

, whenever I go to my internet provider or have work-related problems with the organisation, it is easy to have our

information

ready when they search by our name on the system.

Hence

, people find it convenient to have them stored and ready to use.

On the other hand

due to

the cybercrime growing each day, our detail is at constant risk.

Although

, companies assure us of the strong firewall and safety they maintain for the details, there is no security

that is

100% secure. Each day we hear news of identity theft and people's personal data has been compromised.

For instance

, many of us get spam emails, and messages on phones from an unknown source advertising it. Hackers get our

information

from the data pool and spam us with it nonstop.

Therefore

, the negative aspect of personal detail online can not be ignored. In conclusion, I vehemently believe that the negative side surpasses the positive side.

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