In some countries, people are having children at later age in life. What are the reasons? Do the advantage outweigh disadvantages?

In today's world childbirth is a huge problem for most
women
.Individuals are more inclined towards making their career than
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giving birth to a child.Adapting
this
method has more negative impacts than
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.
Firstly
, the reproductive age of a woman lies between 14yrs to 40yrs.Focusing on late childbirth has caused a rise in the infertility rate.
Women
undergo menopause early so they need to conceive early.Late born child brings many risks to the mother like,physical weakness and mental depression.
For instance
,it has been reported that
women
are developing many obstetric and gynaecological problems as their age advances.PCOS
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has been reported as the most common cause of infertility with advancing age,so doctors are recommending parents plan their family early to avoid
such
issues. On the
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contrary there are some advantages of late pregnancy.Girls should not be forced to marry early
instead
they should be encouraged to study
further
and become independent.In doing so they will be capable of looking after their kids and giving them a bright future.
For example
,many individuals who have persuaded their higher degrees and
then
married have been shown to give a healthy and good life to their future kids.
To conclude
,
although
the merits of late birthing
is
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completing their studies
but
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we cannot ignore the demerits it brings and its number has been enormously increasing.The biggest threat it causes risks to the mother and many
women
become infertile by the time they even think of becoming a parent.In my ,opinion
women
should plan early to become parents than
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wait till they become independent.
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