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In many countries, people throw away a lot of food from restaurants and shops. Why do you think people waste food in this way? What can be done to reduce the amount of food thrown away?

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In many nations
food
 industry has been a concern due
its
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 rising demand.Many individuals waste
food
 when they go dining
to
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at
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 a
resturant
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restaurant
 or a public place.There are many
resons
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reasons
 for
this
 ,one of them is
due to
 its storage and quality.In
this
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eassy
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 I will
elobrate
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elaborate
celebrate
inaddition
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in addition
 to the
above mentioned
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 reason
other
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 causes and ways to prevent them.
Firstly
,there are certain items that cannot be stored beyond a specific period of time.If we store them for long hours it
looses
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its
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their
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 quality and flavour and becomes rotten.
For example
, when we buy bread it comes with
a
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validity after that fungus starts growing over it and eventually
its
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 of no use and we trash it.
Moreover
 in
resturants
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restaurants
 where they cook
huge
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a huge
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amount
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amounts
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 of items storing the
left overs
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leftovers
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 will be a problem and they just throw the
food
.
For instance
, it has been reported in a recent newspaper the amount of
food
 being dumped has increased to
aroung
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around
 35% which leads to
loss
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a loss
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 in
economy
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the economy
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.
On the contrary
, by taking steps we can overcome these problems.
To begin
,
people
 can purchase items that can be stored for a longer period of time like
,
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frozen vegetables,
paraths
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parathas
parts
paths
 and so on. In doing so there is no fear
losing
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 the original quality of the item .
Secondly
,in dine-in
areas
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 the managers can serve
the
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food
 to the poor
people
 or send them to orphan homes where the hungry
people
 can be
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 and in return get a token of appreciation.
To sum up
,in countries
people
 to due lack of knowledge about
the
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apply
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food
 and its expire
snd
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and
 cooking
large
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a large
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amount
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amounts
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 of
food
 are some of the reasons
individulas
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individuals
 tend to waste
food
. By feeding the poor and using frozen foods we as a citizen can prevent the damage caused
in
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by
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 the
food
 industry.
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