The chart gives information about how much energy of different categories produced in France over the period of 5 years.

The chart gives information  about how much energy of different categories produced in France over the period of 5 years.
The pie charts compare and contrast the five different ways
energy
was produced in
France
, which were measured in percentage , over
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11-
year
time period from 1995 to 2005.
Overall
, most
energy
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energies
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were
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produced by gas and coal in
France
.
Whereas
, the least
were
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from nuclear
source
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sources
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and other sectors.
To begin
with, 29.63% and 29.80% of
energy
were produced from gas and coal in the initial
year
, and after 11 years it reported a slight increase in
energy
production in both sectors and
it
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accounted
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% and 30.93% respectively. Meanwhile, the nuclear industry and other sectors were the areas that made up less source of
energy
in
France
, and it was only 6.40% and 4.90% in 1995 .
However
, in 2005 the
energy
production in those industries
had
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rose dramatically and reached 10.10% and 9.10% in that
year
.
By contrast
,
petro
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petrol
was the second major source of
energy
production for
France
and it constituted 29.27% in 1995. But , after
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11 years , it comprised a significant fall in their rating and recorded 19.55% in the
last
year
.
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