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The graphs below show four categories of citrus fruits and the top three countries to which these were exported (in thousand tonnes) in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show four categories of citrus fruits and the top three countries to which these were exported (in thousand tonnes) in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
#graphs #show #four #categories #fruits #three #countries #were #thousand #tonnes #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The bar graphs give information that four kinds
ofcitrus
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of citrus
 fruits that were
Oranges
, Lemons, Grapefruits and others were exported to
top
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the top
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 3 countries. From the graphs, we could know which fruit was exported to which countries in 2012. For
oranges
, South Africa was the top country where imported
them
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1000 thousand
tonnes
, it was double as Egypt which imported 500 thousand
tonnes
. The United
states
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States
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 imported the lowest
amount
 of
oranges
. As lemons were exported to Mexico the most
amount
, it was over 400
thousands
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thousand
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tonnes
.
It's
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 figure was as twice as the United
states
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States
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 did. In terms of Grapefruits, Turkey was the country which imported
them
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the highest
amount
,
on the other hand
, the united
states
 did
in
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200 thousand
tonnes
.
Also
, Mexico imported the most amounts of other citrus fruits in 2002 compared with
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Egypt and the United
States
.
Overall
, the
amount
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number
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 of
oranges
were
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was
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 the
hightest
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highest
 in 2012 compared to other fruits.
ALso
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Also
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, Mexico imported
Lemons
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lemon
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 and other citrus
friuts
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fruits
 a lot.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oranges, tonnes, states, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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