Some people say Histroy is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There is a standpoint among some folk which historical topic is very essential for children that learn in school.

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, some people have a negative perspective and they say: it is better to encourage students to learn science and IT

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historical subjects. from

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era so a wide variety of lives depends on

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technology and science.

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IT and science

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in these subjects in developing countries

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Some people say Histroy is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people believe that people have the right to university education and government should make it free no matter what their financial background. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Recent surveys show increased interest in relocation and travel to other countries. What may be the reasons for this trend, and what will be the possible outcome from this behavior? Provide examples for your opinion.

Nowadays more and more people have to compete with young people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are some possible solutions?

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some education systems make students focus on certain subjects at the age of 15, while others require students to study a wide range of subjects until they leave school. What are the benefits of each system? Which do you think is a better educational system?