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The advantage and disadvantage of watching TV. discuss both views and give your opinion

#advantage #tv
The television
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Television
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 makes
people
 relax and amuse
in
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themselves in
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 their leisure time.
However
, if individuals keep sitting in front of the
TV
, it might be
negative
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a negative
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 impact on their physical health.
This
essey
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essay
 will examine its pros and cons, and as far as I am concerned,
the
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apply
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tv
rime
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time
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 should be limited since it is
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dependent
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.
Main
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The main
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advantagerous
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advantageous
advantages
 deal of
tv
 is a conversation opener.
This
 is because
tv
 programs are made for entertainment
purpose
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purposes
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 regardless of
ages
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age
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.
Thus
, it could be common
topics
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topic
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 to talk
with
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about with
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 friends and co-workers.
Furthermore
, watching
tv
 as a family can be quality time.
For example
, in Japan, the media is broadcasting comedies, which
is
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are
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 enjoyed by all generations every Friday at seven pm, which expected all family members
stay
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to stay
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 at home. Since
then
, the show is loved, and long
run
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running
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 for 50 years
until
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apply
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now as it is needed by the viewers. Yet,
obvious
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the obvious
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 drawback of
tv
 is addictive.
This
 is
due to
 binge, many
people
 tend to regret that they procrastinate the things more important. What is more, it leads to physical problems.
For instance
, if
people
 nibble
snacks
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on snacks
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,
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apply
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while
 watching, resulting in obesity.
In addition
,
majority
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the majority
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 of youngsters have a problem
of
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with
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 their body position which is caused by incompatible angles of bodies toward
to
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apply
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the screen. A Japanese X-ray doctor
say
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says
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 that it is modern ill.
To conclude
,
although
 shows and series are fascinating for everyone to chitchat
at
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in
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 their fields,
people
 should not
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be dependent
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dependent
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depend
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 on
it
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them
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otherwise
 physical health will get worse.
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